I liked it heaps! It's definitely different to what you would normally write, but I feel like it had a rhythmic bounce (for want of a better word) to it. And my favourite part was the Nabi Ibrahim allusion :)
More broadly, I like the idea of imitating a poet for practice. Mary Oliver writes about this: in every form of art the budding artist is meant to imitate the masters (think painters, sculptors etc) before developing a style of their own. Yet in poetry people are usually taught to be original from day one whereas they should imitating the greats for a while before branching out and developing their own unique style.
I might be wrong, but I don't see why you shouldn't include the whole poem, even just for the fact that it is different to your other work (though I happen to like it as well).
No problem, good sir :) I've also noticed the same with my stats as well. But I've also been very lazy so that might explain it.
I found yours overly florid, deliberately so I guess. Definitely energetic and enthusiastic. I rarely comment any more as it takes up too much time, I'm not getting any of my own work done.
Florid eh? Not something I would have noticed, so thank you for sharing! And I appreciate your time. May Allah swt grant you barakah in your time and energy and help you achieve all your goals!
Looool you picked the worse poem of mine to read 😂 this didnt even make sense to my sister, so it's okay. Even I don't know what I'm saying lmao (ehh kind of not really its not how i write normally lol).
I love this! Would love to see the other poem too, this is, I'll admit, quite different from your usual work; however, it's interesting to me how you still do kind of merge your own style, I guess a writer's pen never can stray too far.
I still have to write the other poem lol. And yeah, I think being able to copy another's style such that your poem could pass as penned by them requires a completely different level of mastery of language. It's the difference between, say, painting something heavily inspired by the Mona Lisa vs literally making a copy of it.
(I asked my sis and she was like she didn't get the poem at all haha, so perhaps I should lean more towards my own style even when taking inspiration from someone 😆.)
I liked it heaps! It's definitely different to what you would normally write, but I feel like it had a rhythmic bounce (for want of a better word) to it. And my favourite part was the Nabi Ibrahim allusion :)
More broadly, I like the idea of imitating a poet for practice. Mary Oliver writes about this: in every form of art the budding artist is meant to imitate the masters (think painters, sculptors etc) before developing a style of their own. Yet in poetry people are usually taught to be original from day one whereas they should imitating the greats for a while before branching out and developing their own unique style.
Thanks! That's my fav part too! Maybe I can take that line and find a different poem in my manuscript to add it to, if I don't use this whole poem.
That's really solid and sensible advice from her. How else will one ever learn?
Appreciate you reading!
(I don't know whats going on but my readership stats have nosedived and it's quite puzzling, so thank you for your response!)
I might be wrong, but I don't see why you shouldn't include the whole poem, even just for the fact that it is different to your other work (though I happen to like it as well).
No problem, good sir :) I've also noticed the same with my stats as well. But I've also been very lazy so that might explain it.
For now I have the whole thing in it. I'll just have to see if I like it in the final draft lol.
I found yours overly florid, deliberately so I guess. Definitely energetic and enthusiastic. I rarely comment any more as it takes up too much time, I'm not getting any of my own work done.
Florid eh? Not something I would have noticed, so thank you for sharing! And I appreciate your time. May Allah swt grant you barakah in your time and energy and help you achieve all your goals!
I
DON'T
GET
POETRY
Neither yours nor Whitman's.
Maybe it's because I'm old. Yes, that's what it is. LOL.
Also, do you have your ayat yet?
Looool you picked the worse poem of mine to read 😂 this didnt even make sense to my sister, so it's okay. Even I don't know what I'm saying lmao (ehh kind of not really its not how i write normally lol).
Anddddd uhm let me get that draft ready today 😅
I love this! Would love to see the other poem too, this is, I'll admit, quite different from your usual work; however, it's interesting to me how you still do kind of merge your own style, I guess a writer's pen never can stray too far.
I'm happy to hear that!
I still have to write the other poem lol. And yeah, I think being able to copy another's style such that your poem could pass as penned by them requires a completely different level of mastery of language. It's the difference between, say, painting something heavily inspired by the Mona Lisa vs literally making a copy of it.
(I asked my sis and she was like she didn't get the poem at all haha, so perhaps I should lean more towards my own style even when taking inspiration from someone 😆.)
Thanks for reading!